I look into the mirro
My reflection stares back at me
I look deep into myself
all I saw was who I once was
A child that did so much
A war child many followed
Looking in to my reflection's eyes I see:
I am shattered
Once I was heard
Once I was loved
Once I was praised
But now.....
What once was song
Is now just screams
Ripped apart by war
Pains of death weigh upon my soul
So many dead in my name
What once was song
Is now just screams
I live in the shadow of death
If only I wasn't so blind
Many died because of me
Their blood forever on my hands
What once was song
Is now just screams
They loved me so
Followed my every lead
In one slip of mind
Their lives were taken
What once was song
Is now just screams
I now just sit here
Broken in mind
The memories of that day
Tortured me forever
What wonce was song
Is now just screams
They are gone forever
Because I was naive
Because I was blind
All because of me..
Author notes
I used the prompt from the shadows for this piece I know it's kinda different from what might have been expected
A contest entry
- Quickie Time It Seems!! by Weltt.
550 points, ended June 29, 2008, 8 entries
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deeply haunting poem, with lingering after taste of sadness tained with the hardships of war, all at some stage uin their lives can wether they ever admit or not will make dicisions that will effect others, and this poem portrays that. visible intense, images painted with feeling, deep write.
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Powerful poem.
Yes, powerful poem. Images captured; well done.
The lines:
Ripped apart by war
Pains of death weigh upon my soul
So many dead in my name
is great.
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deeply dark and intense take on that prompt. A little longer than the word limit called for but well done nonetheless!!
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thanks sorry about the length there sorta forgot to check the length :S
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Its great but is it 30 to 60 words???
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I really like this, self reflection is always an interesting take!
Tho, I think the guidelines call for 30-60 words!!??
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