Gray
Upon
Black
Upon
White
Brings
Us
Rain
Tonight
Author notes
Written 9/17/2007 in a poetry class held in the apt bldg where I live.
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Very clever. I like the effective use of one word lines.
Well done with brevity and it even looks good on the page. Presentation matters.
I liked it. ~Pamela 
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Thank you for your thoughtful comments, compliments and applause. I do appreciate them.
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ah the rain - it is a good thing to experience - to soak onself in the drops of life and shine with it. to let everything in the spirtit be cleansed.
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Thankyou for your comment and applause. I do appreciate them. I love the phrase: "to soak oneself in the drops of life and shine with it". We have a phrase here in Seattle, we call the rain: "liquid sunshine". Thanks again for the comment.
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So short yet aspiringly fashioned. It twists within the mind to find the root of what is written. It is powerful and by the end of the write it leaves you with a dousing sense more than a brevitied verse. Each word opens, explodes within the mind to push onward the expansion of irridescent thought. I like this one.
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Thank you, my friend, for your prismatic thoughts. You always surprise me by your acute sense of observation, since you seem quite adept at reading beneath the surface of the lines and mining the diamonds beneath. Again, thank you for the exquisite compliments.
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beautiful.
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Thank you for your compliment and applause. i do appreciate them. Hope all is going well for you.
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i reckon, lose the capitals, it will lets this run a bit smoother, but its a great little glimpse, its a flash thought.
bien
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Thank you for your comment and suggestion; I will consider it. For now, however, I think I'll leave the caps in place.
Hope all is going well with you.
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