Mist
flecks the night
with gentle caress of ice.
Forest
looms from sky
in procection and malice alike.
Sky
infathomable.
Mind too low to recognise,
Heart
lost to shadow
as own fingers are forced
through the skin
cartlidge, and bone.
Through blood and pain
until it's shown.
A skill that must
be finely honed.
Grasp, tight, upon flesh
craving for its home.
Naked
heart is lost to night.
Body lost, soul diminished
despite the lengthly fight.
Broken
torn and tattered
she takes a final leap
and lands in heart shattering
shards.
Author notes
Hope you like it, and it's not too long.
Hope it speaks to you.
Hope you let me know what you think.
A contest entry
- Reserve and Wait by Rose Dark Thorn.
1200 points, ended July 2, 2008, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
So, how do you like my soul??
Comments
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well done! nakedly revealed
the prompt feastingly!
Wow..this is a great poem,
"Naked heart is lost to night...
broken, torn and tattered...
soul diminished despite the lenghthly flight
she takes a final leap...
lands in heart
shattereding shards."
you loved writing this..we can hear...you truly unleashed!
way to write!
ears/Seattle
Hey...Gluttons, our Poets just took Gold & Silver
in this quickie contest!
yes!
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wow this is so beautiful darling,
congrats on your trophie oh my do you deserve it, as usual you created a poem that has such pain, depth and sadness, and you let the reader know the girls feelings, thoughts, and memories in so few words, lovely take on the prompt,
love kitty xxx aka your vampy
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Your words are beautiful, yet they are filled with malice and darkness as well, which is gripping and catches the reader in a trance. Surprising for the picture given, but certainly nowhere near disappointing. Wonderful.
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http://i167.photobucket.com/albums/u131/rosedarkthorn/Pictures/Dark/f_AngelsGoodbm_a16d0a7.jpg
If this one doesn't work for you, let me know, and I'll give you one more.
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