Twisting
Crying
It's so real
Heavy breathing
Screaming out
He holds her in
Shaking
Sweating
Trying to find a way out
Darkness
Imagies of him
Running but getting nowhere
Hearing her name
She jumps
finally awake
Whew it was just a dream!
Author notes
Your prompt is: Dreams
In a list
A contest entry
- PIF Contest by Luckintheshadows.
510 points, ended June 30, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be kinder than necessary, for everyone you meet is fighting some kind of battle!
Comments
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ooooh...I love the pace of this poem, your short, eye-catching lines gripped me. There's just a little typo in Line 11, but that doesn't bother me, because my typos are apalling, you may want to fix it for yourself though?
Oh, and I love the picture you added...compliments the poem perfectly!
Thanks for sharing this, and for entering my contest,
Luck. -
You did a wonderful job sissy.. It was dark and very emotional yet the ending was kind of like.. funny a bit.. because I've had bad dreams like that and when I wake up I say that..Lol. Good job sissy.. Best of luck..
Angel
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