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Treasured Sin (To steal a kiss)

To steal a kiss would be a treasured sin.
Take it from me without asking.
Make my knee's weak.

 

 

Make me mad then kiss me rough.

Make me cry then kiss me gently.

Make me happy then kiss me lovingly.

 

 

Take what belongs to you.

Its your unspoken Prize.

Yours to take as long as I'm the only to receive.

 

 

Sneak up and kiss my lips.

Sneak up and kiss my cheek.

Sneak up and kiss my neck

 

 

Steal a kiss.

Steal my heart.

Steal my love.

 

 

To steal a kiss would be the ultimate treasured sin

 





 

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  • daran
    August 16

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    Silky soft

    I really enjoy the depiction of a soft tender yearning for love and for someone to make this person fall in love or to "steal their heart"


  • Midnight-x-Rose gold member
    August 2
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    awww kisses are wonderful... I love them.

  • ColdShadowNessa
    June 29

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    AUNTY BROOK AGAIN I SAY AWESOME! I LOVE LOVE LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ur still an awesome poet and you know it (not suoppsed to ryhme)Love it!and you! Nessa


  • chasingwhiterabbits
    June 29

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    FINALIST. Yeah, you have a typo (week instead of weak in the first stanza). I like the "make me..." parts best And the idea of a stolen kiss as a treasured sin is just magical. So good job!


  • WickedOne
    June 29

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    love it babe keep it up i love the part"Take what belongs to you.

    Its your unspoken Prize.

    Yours to take as long as I'm the only to receive."love u sexy=)

  • hardeepb
    June 28

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    Amazing

    I've been going through this for the past six months...we always debated stealing a kiss...just one time;

    "Make me mad then kiss me rough.
    Make me cry then kiss me gently.
    Make me happy then kiss me lovingly."

    We did a lot of that...and don't know if it was a positive. But the kisses we shared were beyond heavenly.
    Always just one more time...we wished. Read limechic 's poem "We Can't"...you'll see what I mean.

    I loved this piece; it's dear to my mine. Keep on writing. I love everything the colours used, the structure and the ending.

    "To steal a kiss would be the ultimate treasured sin"

    Now I can only do that in my dreams; good luck in my contest, I say gold. 10/10. Perfect.

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