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Eros * Aphroditie **

Alpha

Blue
Depth

I
Slide
Within

Your
Heart
Space

Empty
Now
Bag
Is

Horizontal
We
Lay

Pillows
Hug

Omega

Author notes

* http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Eros_(mythology)

**http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Aphrodite

minor editing on 7/01/2008



See also: http://allpoetry.com/poem/2773208

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  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    October 1
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    Thank You 4 Entering our Contest Project Un-Cliche

    Hello ther eim a judge with the contest stated above and any ways this is a very interesting poem. I find your poem to be quite well penned and very short n sweet. it would feel like as if lovers are embracing one another in the middle of nature afte rbeinga way from eahc other for so long then again it could merley be a simple perosn lost and stranded in the woods and well curling up and cuddling with a bear LOL! any ways nice poem and good luck in the contest

  • Woodchuck4400 silver member
    September 22
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    Well, you know me, I am a literalist. It seemed to me that it was love making on a camping trip, or at least those are the memories your poem brought up.

    Great job.

    Mike

    • Trafalger679Curious silver member
      September 22
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      Thanks for your comments; compliment and applause. I do appreciate them. Your interpretation is fine, although it's not quite what I had in mind, when I wrote this.

      • Woodchuck4400 silver member
        September 22
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        I didnt figure it was, but as a literalist, and a camper, not yet fueled by morning coffee, that is what I came up with.

  • tomisb gold member
    September 4

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    Vertical we are one, plunging out of the womb of zero to end in a minus, the fallen tree, cleaved, uprooting would be personal. Very concise word choice. All feels a little cold and missing how messy it all is.
    Love, Tom B.

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  • Tirrell gold member
    September 4

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    Splendid!
    This is such a wistfull feel in this simple form.
    Such a warm and resolute peice, I like this. As well I admire the spirituality of this poem. Well done.

    . Rewarded 4

  • Topnotchsy
    August 11
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    Very interesting piece. Says a whole lot with just a few words. Nice write!!


  • poetrandy gold member
    August 10
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    Wow! This poem is great!

    Trafalger679Curious, another very good, but well worded, different poem!


  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    August 9

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    very nice

    I liked this. it was very interesting and unusual too but well written with a good point too. any ways creative wording and an attractive format through out this poem really makes it a winner. I enjoyed the information you provided with the links as wlel. anyw ays keep up the good work 3 applauses =)


  • Terry Collett
    July 18

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    Good.

    Reminds me of the poetry that Appoloinaire used to write way back in the 1900s in France and I love the unflowing of it like a flower opening. Yes, good, very good.

    . Rewarded 4


  • leo2
    July 10

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    I could have used a little more detail in the middle part but the beginning and the end of the story was adequate to light the fires of my imagination.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long
    ps. Thanks for reading and commenting on my work. I do appreciate it very much.

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