She hurts those around her
Immensibly
Immberably
Imposibly
Swiviling in pain
Hurting
Hating
She hates this
She dosn't want this
Its not the fait she would have choosen for those around her
She loves those she hurts
With all she has
But she can't help it
How can she change whats clearly imprinted on the soal of her heat
What shows through to the glow in her eyes
Can she really be blamed
Their pain is only a reflection of her own
All thats been done to her
Theres no true justice
And shes to blame
Their pain
Thier agony
All her fault
Her pain
Also her fault
She dosn't care
She'll take it all
All the pain
All the suffering
Of all the world
She dosn't have him
So what does it matter
Author notes
I like apples! lol. Okay, in case you can't tell her hurting everyone else is supposed to be the sin.
A contest entry
- forgive me father for i have sinned by j-ay rose.
350 points, ended July 26, 2008, 40 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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so sad
i felt this was so sounds like a heart been broken and doesnt matter about life anymore it is so sad to hear something like that well done with letting feeling flow -
full of emotion
I like how you have lines that are just one word. It makes it flow nice. I feel your frustration. Love sucks doesn't it? lol -
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Yes it definatly does! lol Thanks for the comment!
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