The Darken room was only lit by a small candle,
the screams were sounding in the room.
Chained to the wall a boy hangs, blood running down his back,
the father of the boy was whipping him.
Cutting the skin with every stroke of the switch,
the boy yelled in pain.
the beating ended and the boy was let down,
the servant held him up, the father taking the boy by the chin and lifting his head,
slapping his face, his father turning to the servant and saying
"His heart is still pure but a few more rounds of this and he be done.
" the servant nodded and placed the boy back on the wall for a fourth round of punishment .
A Father not from birth but by force,
his heart was ice, never loving any thing human.
but loving only torment and pain.
Author notes
I like is one because of the pain I was felling at the time, My life goes in so many directions, I fell like I'm chained to a wall and my worse enemy is beating me to death,
please comment on this one ..
A contest entry
- Dark, I want Dark by Riftkin.
525 points, ended July 3, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
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this is dark and interesting. its a sad story but what was i suppose to take from it? i believe this came from a personal place and it made me think a little. thanks for entering my moresome.
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This is the kind of dark I was looking for. Amazing story line. I absolutley love it. =]
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Congratulations on the honorable mention. This certainly packs a punch.
BTW,thank you for including the author's note, because very few people did. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck! -
That is interesting... and I am thinking it is a good entry.
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thank you for entering this dark poem ... the story held me from start to finish.
Riftkin
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Darkness oozes from every word... there is no redemption of the evil portrayed... Well done and best of luck...
Ken
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