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garden of earthly delights

Did Bosch know the centuries old Divine Comedy?

Appreciation does not require belief,

but painful death was disagreements price.

 

He could disguise ban views, poke fun with sly art;

clever puns made by paint brush laid to canvas.

There is profiled in his first pannel's grinning,

wink/nudge, distain for all religious fantasies.

 

Pannel three's outward gaze reveals no dismay

at musical torments for sinners' shaded hell.

 

Five centuries gone Dali has nothing on him.

Garbless pale figures in dreamscapes make his vision

timeless as consciousness complexities.

 

Did painting super reality inspire

John Milton's poetry of  Paradise Lost?

 

Was Bosch merely joking in his fifieth year,

reflecting on savage justifications

of a middle age?

 

These hundredsof years later

that dogma remains in some cultures.

Thankfully our view is larger, the world is smaller.

Not metaphore, but joke.

 

Humor becomes you, Hieronymus.

We fortunate can now join in your laughter.

Damination is reserved for other blasphemies,

as is  paradise with ten thousand virgins.

 

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  • onerios13
    July 27

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    I enjoyed the intricacies of this very much. It indeed is a painting of words touching both the historical and the allegorical. Very richly presented.

    Thank you for entering.
  • magneticblue
    July 21
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    What is it with people making references to works I'm reading and/or just read? Maybe those works inspired me to write this contest...*sigh* it is really obvious that I'm tired. Good write, very biting and to the point. Introduces interesting and thought provoking ideas while remaining very intellectual. Thanks for entering.

  • NeonRose silver member
    June 30

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    Hi, and welcome to the POM Contest!

    A sort of 'trial by fire' for you, I see. The other judges have clearly defined the problems associated with you entry.

    It is a creative and complicated write, with some marvelous imagery and use of language..however, it really does not meet the criteria of this particular contest.

    The list of rules provided on the contest page are followed religiously, and you have broken almost all of them!

    My scores will appear in final remarks.

    Remember! No editing once a judge has commented!
    • The priceless advise I received is more important than any

      points or prizes. I am so grateful. I read one of Bear's poems and was shown the light. I wonder if the same rules apply to all of his contests so I can print them out and be guided as I write for the next of his contests? You must realize that it is as difficult to find good contests as it is to fine good poetry. Like a doctor, if I find a good contest author I tend to stick with him. Thanks again for commenting and not just disqualfing me. I feel honored.

  • Arkbear gold member
    June 30

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    Hello :)

    I sure wish I could give this entry rave reviews, yet I can not ~

    This is full of beauty, yet penned in a mannar which disquises your work and Theme ~

     

    We ask for Poetic Format, and you have crossed over into Prose and Free verse....IMHO ~

     

    Your lengthy stanza....paragraph, is hindering the Flow & Tone of this write as well :(

     

    Your thoughts appear to be choppy and unfocused ~

     

    The journey which I was hoping to travel...never took place :(

     

    I do hope you try again in the POW coming next week.....we accept all types of talents.....but we only allow our Rules to be followed ~

     

    I am going to place this on my scoreboard....just so you can se what it is we......I.....am looking for as a PO' Contest Judge....ok?

     

    Ok.....here we go!

     

    Good luck and God bless you!

     

    Bear ~

     

     

     

    Title   8.5....lengthy, and would not make me stop and read it....unless I wanted to read the genre of nature ~

    Flow   8.75...too many stops and starts....and lengthy lines make me los my breath -

    Depth   9.75....nice job....but Focus more on your Theme -

    Theme   8.0....confusing....unles read a few times -

    Feelings   9.4...I felt something....not sure what...but something -

    Grammar   9.9....I think you have a talent for words and poetry in general -

    Presentation 7.0....one long paragraph is not apealing -

    Uncommonness  9.8....I would like to know more about this Theme.....nice job -

    Sit & Ponder Affect  8.95....yes....I did ponder....but wondered more than pondered -

    Ability to follow Rules  8.5..laid ( to ) canvas......complexities ( of ) consciousness.....Poetry ( of ) Paradise.......( of ) a middle age.....( of ) years later......and some others towards the end......so just watch out next time and you will score higher :)

    Bears Score:  88.55

    Great job for your first PO' Contest!

    No editing once a Judge has touched your work ~


  • islekine
    June 30

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    Aloha and welcome to POM...

    I'm sorry I didn't catch this before the contest closed...this has been a busy week for all involved...
    This has a lot of filler words...and is very on the fence prose/poetry....Also title was not used in reverse in the poem itself...although it is a well thought out piece, it just isn't a contender...my scores will be in the final notes. Best wishes in the contest! Hope to see you and your talents back next week.....watch those rules! We are really picky!
    Thanks again for entering...
    REMEMBER: No editing once a judge has commented.
    Write on!
  • This is filled with filler words.. The And of are all not allowed to be used. You didn't include the required info in the AN. Theme and POM contest...
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