Sometimes I hear
a mad fly about my brain
that song he likes to play -
everyone knows
we’re strange,
it makes me mad
those labels we slap
around like wasps
buzzing angrily
about our minds.
Don’t they
realise the smears stick,
forever glued
to the papers of
our memories.
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Love it
I really like this piece... I agree that we shouldn't label people. "Forever glued to the papers of our memories." I love those lines the best I think...I'm not sure tho...nice.
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Wow amazing work!
Wow amazing work! Just love the way you take us through the way you think, the way your mind ponders on things, and so light to read too and in just these few well w ritten lines you say so much, wow that is very clever stuff, bravo, its brilliant, love it! Well done!
Poetic Hugs,
Kaz.
Kazytc xx
Thank you so much for your kind review of my work, glad you liked it!
It is a great honour to enter your wonderful competition.
Poetic Thanks & Hugs,
Kaz.
Kazytc XX
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Really interesting piece indeed, Great use of metaphors which are slightly humourous (mind me lol). The lines 'forever glued
to the papers of
our memories' are the highlight to the entire piece and sums it up nicely. Great work!
~Emily~ xx
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Interesting
Not bad, it flows along nicely. -
I love your writing
You always take me aback "we're strange, it makes me mad"
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Good
Interesting stunningly beautiful work .my friend and wonderful thoughts, written well, thank you and may God always bless you. There was no error. No typos. Nothing to change. I look forward to your next write
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a really interesting read.
it felt like satire at one point (:
"forever glued
to the papers of
our memories"
ingenious
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