Adrenalin flowing through my veins.
Wanting action ready for some strange.
Blood pumping hard different at will.
Mind boggling imaginations of many thrills.
Do we all have this lust of insanity.
Attractions reaching out grabbing for personal beauty.
The thrill of knowing of wanting to being touched.
But still lingering then wanting, that torture, we call lust.
Author notes
Thanks for the contest ... Your friend in Poetry... JackReed3...
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Comments
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You really did a wonderful job in explaining lust! The wording made the imagery just jump out of the page.
Thanks for your entry, and for following the rules.
Kari
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Hi there
I don't see any indication thet this poem was written for napomo. Could you send some indication that it was before we comment please
Gaylene
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Nicely done
Unique and creative
Thank you for sharing and for being part of the contest
The best to you! -
Title- 2/5
Creativity- 2/5
Use of metaphors, imagery, etc.- 4/10
Overall package- 2/5
Total= 10/25
Well, this was good..
but I found it not to be
the dirty pretty I'm used
to seeing. And it was
lacking imagery, depth
and metaphor which I
was looking for. But i'm
sure when worked on this
will be superb!
Thanks for entering -
This has amazing flow to it. So easy to read and had me hooked from start to finish. I love it and the last line:
But still lingering.. Then wanting.. that torture, we call lust..
Gosh, I just love this.
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Thank you for entering and expressing yourself in this unique write!
Lynda
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