It's in the wonder in my eyes
When I look upon you, and can't believe
That someone so stunning, so wonderfully gorgeous
Has deigned to give me undivided attention
It's in the earnestness of my embraces,
As if you would disappear outside my grasp,
And be a phantom, a spectral image
That I yearn toward, and pray to make true
It's in the breath with which I sang
Your angelic name, the living nightmare,
My Dream come false, the deafened ear
That sought a closer male insinuation
It's in the silent cries of children
That need a more permanent father figure,
I can only laugh at your foolish pretensions,
And thank the stars that my path leads elsewhere
It's the curious wonder in my mind,
To think that I ever wanted you,
What preposterous concepts! what childish greed
Fed fevered hearts daily, and skewed true need.
Author notes
Ya lost it, babe, I'm gone for good.
Bye,
Giovanni
Written January 3rd, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Love to Burn by Fire-Pistil.
400 points, ended January 22, 2004, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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can we say.. BITCH?
sorry. this made me angry at her. grr. -_-
ANYWAYS, i like this allot, can relate
good poem, nice bashing, OHOH and you deserve someone SO MUCH BETTER THEN HER. YEA. I SAID IT. 
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I have nothing but good things to say about this poem. The word choices are wonderful and I was going to tell you my favorite line, but there are to many! There is alot of emotion here..wow. -
ha ha thank you for entering! i love the direction the poem drifts into. logic and good sense have no place in love
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Wow! Cool. I usually don't writte love poems. I only have 1. But it really sucks. But anyways keep up the good work!
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Sounds like you have her number! Sometimes our first impression is so far from the truth. I didn't look at the collection this was in, so when it turned in the middle, I was surprised, but tickled too. You are quite clever, Gio, and a true lover of women. The right gal is going to slip in when you least expect it! And she will be worth the wait. Bravo, Gio.
~ becky
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poignant and evocative
Ah, Gio. I am glad if you're taking care of yourself and leaving Ms. Wrong behind....but, I hear pain in there still. For that, I am sending a
....and assurance from just ahead on the trail to say "it's a bit rough, but you can make it....follow me." You poured your heart into this one and it shows, bud. I particularly loved the lines "My Dream come false, the deafened ear That sought a closer male insinuation". Yeah....change the genders around and you wrote my tale. Sorry, sweets....I know it feels like crap. Shake the dust of her off your feet and move on....just like your poem says.
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heh...a great write. Love the way the words fit so well with one another, and finally rhyme at the end. very nice!
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sweet release
You go, boy!! Loved this write. Very deep and full of passion. I harmonize with and echo your mantra..."ya lost it, babe, I'm gone for good." -
good for you
way to follow those instincts
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Yayyyyyyyyyyyyyyy!!!! go Ap! you tell her! (hope she gets to read this!)
So many men I have met have made me feel like this and usually its quite a satisfying feeling
(maybe thats just cos I am a right cow bag lol)
great as usual babe
Take care
hugs
Hayley x x x x
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