Freedom born before twilight skies,
as the roaring of trade winds
press against nubile flesh.
Soul unleashed from cloaks of burden,
I will stand in silence
before the rising tide, awaiting judgment.
I do not fear the fading light
that lives within your eyes,
fully accepting fate will leave obstacles
on whichever path is traversed.
Emotions and spirit burnt raw,
yet I refuse to pander to whims of angst.
I will go forth and fly in formation
with the doves that define my destiny.
Author notes
Image credit: Miracles Happen - by katrinabc @ deviantart
http://katrinabc.deviantart.com/art/Miracles-Happen-I-52163878
In a list
A contest entry
- Make me sigh in 24 hrs (any length) by poet2angels.
475 points, ended July 1, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Detailed critique welcome
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Yes, I do believe your style and flow has drastically changed and I bet I know who we can "thank/blame"?? haha..
I learned from the same person, so don't worry.. lol. Anyways, this was a wonderful write as always. I am sure it deserved more than HM, but then maybe I am just being Biased.. LOL.
Love ya much,
~Krys~
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Thanks so much for sharing this wonderful poem with me. Your words go so well with the picture. It makes me feel good to read them.
Good luck in the contest.
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Wonderful Poem!!!!!
Hello my friend. I hope all is well with you. Your poem was simply lovely. A great take on the beautiful picture. Very soft and carefree imagery to read. Thank you for sharing your talent. A pleasure to read this morning. You take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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You have given us some great poetry these days
another wonderful take on the prompt and as Poet2angles said love the freedom of thoughts.
Love and Light
Frozentearz
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Beautiful!
I love the freedom expressed in this piece just as in the picture...The ending really touched me ...
Amazing write!
Lynda
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