I lie before you naked,
as pools of pleasure adorn my bare skin.
Desperate for your touch
the animal within claws eager for release.
Submerge yourself within the cool depths of my love.
Can you feel the heat?
As you swim within the icy waters of my desires
feel the passion that lies beneath...bubble and burn.
Tread the waters of my emotions carefully,
as I bare my heart to you.
Don't be decieved by what's on the surface
what matters are my feelings that run iceberg deep.
Writhe with me wrapped in ice sheets of intimacy
dance with me upon the icecaps of my love....
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Now this is really a wonderful, erotic verse, using fantastic metaphors and brilliant imagery. You were certainly up to the challenge! Nice use of alliteration! Best dirt pretty poem I have read in a while. Thank you so much for entering my contest!
Linda
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Very creative Sugar. Deep powerful senusal. Very well-written indeed. Stunning piece really. Good luck in the competition hun.
Dark
Wishes
Wayne Leon
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Thank you sweetie
I appreciate your constant support
Tis a pleasure to have you read and comment
Truly valued
Love ~sugar~ xxx
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i love this a whole lot sug hon i think you did a very great job i enjoyed this good luck in the contest
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it wasn't easy
always value and appreciate your comments to the max
~sugar~
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the challenge was perfect sis, and I loved the imagery you put forth in this. Good luck in the conest, and thank you so much for sharing the beauty of you always.
Bosslady
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Hi Bosslady
I had to rise to the challenge couldn't let it go.
I appreciate your support at all times. Thank you
for reading. ~sugarcookie~
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Even a nature pic can bing out the best of erotic thoughts. Good read
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Thank you Ms sexy
your words are truly appreciated
~sugar~
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There is such a depth to this I love these lines
Tread the waters of my emotions carefully,
as I bare my heart to you.
Don't be decieved by what's on the surface
what matters are my feelings that run iceberg deep.
These speak volumes we are often afraid of being hurt and there is always so much more to love than what is visible on the surface. I also got a smile from your word play eg bare skin; that is just brilliant thinking.
Good luck in the contest with this sugar, I could never have come up with anything like this.
Emma
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Hi Emma
Glad you enjoyed this one. Thank you so much for your lovely comment. truly valued and appreciated...there is always more to love than what lies on the surface. Exactly like an iceberg.
~sugar~
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You're welcome
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Ok, I can bearly stand to read this, for the 3rd time. Kudos to you, I could never make anything sensual out of the given pic; funny yes, sensual no, you seem to have accomplished both without losing your bearings, hahahahahahahaha.
Seriously, a great write, I love it, it should be do well in the contest. I hope you can bear the weight of that big shiny gold trophy when they hand it to you...
Ok, I'll be good now, but just barely! I love you, B
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LOL!!! It didn't come easy B...I am glad you got so much pleasure from this, it was fun to do...I just had to rise to the challenge.
I love you too B
~sugar~
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Awesome
I knew you would pen some thing amazing and you have
with this one.
Such feelings felt and watery imagery
Good luck hun
Julie xx
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Julie everyone thinks mines funny???
Thanks for the challenge and your fab comment.
Always appreciated
~sugar~
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*chuckle*
Very funny, sis. That second stanza suits the picture perfectly. "Desperate for your touch, the animal within claws eager for release." Good one.
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Don't ask bro, it was a challenge.
Appreciate you reading
~sugar~
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THIS MAKES TWICE TODAY - I'VE SEEN THIS PIC AND I'M SORRY TO SAY THAT EVEN A KINKY AND NAUGHTY FELLOW LIKE ME DIDN'T GET A RISE FROM IT although I'm rolling on me lawn laughing me handsome ass off!
Submerge yourself within the cool depths of my love.
Can you feel the heat?
That is a heat that I can do without after looking at the picture! HE! HE! This is the second time of seen this pic today and all I can say is I'd prefer to see your picture and then you know what this naughty boy who's HOTTER than the average polar bear would be doing! LOL!!! GOOD LUCK in the contest with this one, Sugar Babe (which I believe may be a bear, too) HE! HE! And as this bear has a pole of last I'll take your word for it he's a male - as as hard as I looked I couldn't see that 'pole or hole of lust' between those hairy legs! LOL!!!
Peace & Love!
Earl.
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I was challenged what can I say...maybe there is another polar bear reading this getting off in it. LMAO! I couldn't let the challenge go...I was planning a day off. DAMN!
Appreciate you reading as always and your comment as left me laughing as much as I have left you. WICKED!
Love you ~sugar~ xxx
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She looks hot to trot!
(the picture) I see your just being naughty again. Maybe, a good spanking would be in order mistress. I think it would be quite fun. I'm bending over. My what a large paddle you have, dearie.
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Which pic mines there too?
My word Greg we are in a naughty mood. LOL!!! You are definately over due a spanking...glad you are already in position...I see you know your place. 
Appreciate you reading and commenting.
Love ~sweetness~ xxx
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