You want to be dazzled?
Well, I'm feeling razzled,
The words won't come into my head,
I made up a few, but they just wouldn't do
I'd better lie down on my bed.
You see, folk haven't always the time
To bother with metre and rhyme,
I'd quite like to play
In the usual way
But whatever I say
Sounds sublime.
I've never been boastful or rude,
In fact, I'm a bit of a prude
And bad words like shit
Make me tremble a bit
Oh fuck, now I've gone and been rude.
Complacent? I sure as hell ain't
And you might find my ramblings quaint
But to write something down
Makes me grumble and frown
Tries my patience, not that of a saint.
Pauses: and lapses
Into blank verse
The words stray
Down the page
Like the slow
Pendulous
Ticking
Of a
Somewhat
Unsprung
Unmetric
clepshydra
Tick
ick
ck
And the sun
Dazzles
The
eye
of
Great
Roth
Hoth
Ra
A contest entry
- The Crime of Complacency by onerios13.
2700 points, ended July 11, 19 entries
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eh. funny and dismissive.
yet, still had a hint of brilliance scattered somewhere in the downward spiral.
Thanks for the crash.
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I can remember the last time I got lied! xx
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Since when has being a prude kept anyone from being boastful and rude? I find it's the opposite; they just do it underhandedly, so much so, they think they're fooling anyone. lol. Well, like the way this goes to hell in a handbasket in the final seconds. And never understood that "Now I lay me down to sleep bit." Tis true about the Scottish schooling; I'm reading in a memoir of Alice Munro's that you all were the first to send the kids to schools to learn to read the bible and the writer in you just took off!
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Good point about the prude and the underhand rudeness of same. I agree totally. Bottling things up ain't necessarily a good way towards emotional stability. I once read a great wee poem on Scottish education: probably it's in copywrite, so I cant google it. It goes:
Scottish Education
I telt ye,
I telt ye..
Enough said. Thanks for the comment.
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"lie down", not "lay down". I am shocked, Keith. I thought the Scottish educational system was good. Maybe you are getting confused - can you remember last time you got lied?
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Help ma boab, and me with an O level in English. I have amended the manuscript so as to avoid any further confusion. As for remembering the last time I got lied; that's for me tae ken and you tae find oot! To criticise my literary masterpiece on the grounds of a wee slip in the tense. I ask ye! Well done.
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