tears mix with her blood
the p.a.i.n
fingers grip the phone
white knuckles, b/r/o/k/en heart.
'i'm s.o.r.r.y'
that line. over and o
v
e
r
cheap excuses all the time
it's not the same anymore is it?
coughing and choking
her fingers find the back of her throat
and as everything comes up she's calmed down.
she stops.
and smiles
s-a-t-i-s-f-a-c-t-i-o-n.
a rarity and a delight.
if i lose weigt he'll love me.
all dolled up.
bra hoists up her breasts.
skirt just long enough to cover her scars
fishnet tights criss-cross like all those scars.
bits her lip just long enough to taste her own blood
fake smile plastered on her face
a haze of deceit and cheap perfume
this night will end like every other.
the glitter replaced with vomited stained bedding and a bottle of vodka disposed in her stomach
trying to drown out any feelings of love.
replaced with hate
and l.u.s.t
Author notes
Dirty Pretty♥
A contest entry
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Comments
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Very powerful and emotional write. =] Excellent imagery as well, it was very nicely written. Great job
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***'i'm s.o.r.r.y'
that line. over and o
v
e
r
cheap excuses all the time
it's not the same anymore is it?***
Aside from the kind of awkward alignment of the word *over*, I loved the part above.
And also:
***trying to drown out any feelings of love.
replaced with hate
and l.u.s.t***
A fantastic finish to a well penned poem.
Couple of spelling errors though:
***if i lose weigt he'll love me.***
---> *weight* not *weigt*
***bits her lip just long enough to taste her own blood***
---> *bites* not *bits*
Thanks for entering and best of luck.
Keira
-- blackwood.baby -
Great poem
it had so much emotion in it. it was really sad though, no girl should ever put herself through this.
xoxox Zoe <3
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