if i could
i would start over
erase all the pain.
if i could
i would stop.
i would end it.
i couldn't
so i had to
live with the pain
i couldn't
so you were the
one who would end it
i watched,
i waited,
i thought,
as you left me
there alone,on the
streets of new york.
if i could
i would start over
erase all the pain.
if i could
i would stop.
i would end it.
i couldn't
so i had to
live with the pain
i couldn't
so you were the
one who would end it
A contest entry
- Break my heart and make me cry by God is my reality.
900 points, ended August 11, 2008, 79 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow
looks like i'm the only one who has a way with words. speak for yourself as well when you say that......because this piece was flawless. i don't know what this chick under me is saying, that was packed with emotion and is deep enough to measure up to an ocean. great job. keep it up.
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Kinda random, kinda sad. I don't think there is enough emotion in it. I see regret and pain, but I think it could be a lot deeper. Neways, good luck in the contest
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Interesting write.....I don't know what to say...This was very good....Had a very neat context to it....I enjoyed it...Thanks for the read and keep it up!
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