When love perched on me
came like a raven upon the tree
His love flew me in a reverie
soft like rain on the sea
swayed the blue upon the sky
and the air to dream in ecstasy
ease that came with breeze
I loved him to much
but did I ever love once!...
I loved him to much
but have I ever love...
Author notes
A poem expressing the veiw of a women who doesn't know what love is as she was hurt so many now she says how she loved him so much but she is not certain with the line "but did I ever love once"
A contest entry
- Prompt around 20 lines by mysticstorm.
1000 points, ended July 9, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I think this is lovely - romantic and written so well. Good luck in the contest
Love, Lane
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thank you for your sweet comment
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I will say first off all things aside, you did a great job with the color scheme to match your poem. I say that because it makes it flow in the mind easier.
Other than that I find it interesting that the whole poem pretty much works on this line. "His love flew me in a reverie", as has as I note that is. It is what draws my attention and seems to tie it together.
Best of luck in the contest. Also to your future writes.
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BEAUTIFUL!!!!!!!!
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thank you
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You did a wonderful job!!! This flowed so well! and the image was sad yet thoughtful! You really put a lot of emotion into this write and it shows in the feel of the words.. I really loved this.. It was soft yet the metaphors really set it off well.. You did beautifully!! I wish you the best of luck!
Angel
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Interesting
Reminds me of someone I knew...she never loved before until she met me and she fought with herself if it was really love; finally we both realized that it was. It had to be cut short and maybe it wasn't true love because she doesn't feel it anymore but...love nonetheless. Interesting read with a sort of personification in the form of a raven...unique structure as well. Enjoyable read that makes you think. 8/10! -
I love the four rhyme poetry line. Very lovely, and the feeling you get from the raven is that it is all a great mystery ready to be found out. Ecstacy is a brilliant and beautiful blue word, very good job.
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Great piece here Classical. I think you may mean "I loved him too much" instead of 'to much'. This reads great. I like the rhyme and language.
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Lovely metaphor and deep feelings for heartfelt emotions...well written...thank you for sharing!
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