She sit’s a broken dreamer,
against my window’s glass.
Looking out to pain’s destruction,
the shadows that will not pass.
And without knives her scars appear,
they bleed invisibly.
And slowly across her cheeks come tears,
taking her into hell’s reality.
The only thoughts that consume her mind,
are of a window, or a knife.
She loses all of which I know,
losing to my strife.
She is the one who wishes so,
death to take her path.
For I want nothing more or less,
than to win against this demonic wrath.
I have faith in his world,
and I am willing to follow God’s sight.
But though she tries she cannot see,
I fear for me she’ll lose our fight.
Author notes
This is about me when I go through depression, and I kno it is a bit sad but it really is about the struggle I am going through and how I am trying to help who I become when I go through my depression. My BF does not actually believe in depression so I am trying to express that is real, but I want to help myself. No one wants to go through this. Feel free to leave our opinion.. always looking to better my work
A contest entry
- Lets be Honest by St. Poet.
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Depression is so very real, and millions of people will agree when I say it's so hard to get back up when you're down that low. Death may seem like an answer at the time, but just remember and think about all the things you'll never get to experience if you do die! I like how your poem gives off the foremost emotions of depression, but my personal experiences enhances the emotions, and makes it deeper. It's a beautiful poem with amazing metaphors. Thanks for entering!
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Stupendous
You really wrote an amazing poem with this one, and one that I can honestly relate to very very well. It's amazing how your words sound so similar to my own when I write about this subject, which would make sense. What especially caught my attention is the first two lines of the second stanza, because I can actually name a few poems that I've written where I've used that same image. Anyways, I love how you write, and I really hope to read of your work as soon as I can.
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wow thank you so much for your kind words, I really apprecheate them. Best of luck to you in your writing!
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Very good
An honesty hard to find, this is a truly great poem. This is exactly what i was looking for, thank you for entering, and good lock
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