Just small pieces
of my heart remain
confusion and naiveté
meet inundating pain.
since the night you left
there's not much left of me
slowly draining all myself
twisting mind of agony.
Darkness and obsession
are all that I know
when will you come back?
The truth is lies to go.
Author notes
hope it is adequate for now....may be editing it..as the muse flies...
A contest entry
- prompt contest by Brokentruth93.
300 points, ended July 2, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
honesty please...
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Less is more...
Deep, dark & srangely comforting...
Honest, vulnerable & reflective...
So much said in so few words...
Another heartfelt & moving write you have here...
Well done!!!
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thank you so much for your kind comment..
it is always so nice when a fellow writer comments..
blessings..
namaste..
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No probs, it was my pleasure...
Take care,
Fritz.......
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Great title - and well used for the final line - i liked the length of the piece - well laid out and it reads well.
As said, great title, and very well used in the last two lines.
James
xxx
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i really like this one, i love how it all works together!! thank you for entering my contest!!!
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