wedged between the stones
of my hips, your body’s
earnest plea: a prayer
pulling godlike answers
from my deepest
cleavage
Author notes
no wailing wall...only answered prayers
In a list
A contest entry
- 20 words by Melissa Gayle.
1750 points, ended July 1, 39 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Back for my regular visit
and still loving this...
Why do people always call out to god
while having sex?
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thanks, yes.. must be the rapture
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The return tha favor thing led me here and I liked this one so much it definitly deseved a second reading and comment.
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some writers capture a moment...
you have captured an entire life tucked between the first maybe and the final yes
beautiful, like you
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Very sensual in an awe inspiring way
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ZIONIST MEANS WISHING TO LIVE AND DIE IN JERUSALEM
FELICITATIONS! YOU STIR THE FRIDAY PRAYING DESIRE IN THE MOST LONELY HEBREW COWBOY-ME, HUMBLY.
BLESS,
PROF. MES -
Loved this.
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amazing
a cwell deserved award. Congrats!!
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Thanks, Rob - not everyday that I finish higher than you, lol!
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stunning....I wish I could think of something more creative to say, but your poetry has a knack of leaving me speechless
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Thanks once again, Jersene...you've said enough to make me smile
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earth and body...
this is a pretense to a rock climbers fantasy. a pouch full of crampons, carabiners, axes and rope and beautiful view of sunshine on a Jerusalem morning. exquisite as always. ~ Ed
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Your comment is so poetic, Ed. You made me see Jerusalem again - the golden city (I was there many years ago). Thank you so much
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Bravo! Well done. Exceptional piece, I dare say!
[[calms down]]
The wording was excellent...and the way you sculpted this piece was divine. You are really talented. REALLY.
I'll be dropping by your page later.
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lolol at the 'calms down'!! Thank you so much - glad you enjoyed this one
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My goodness Nicolette!
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This is sublime.
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Ahhh. This is sweet and subtle. (And is bereft of Palestinian kids throwing rocks at your bus!) Great poem. So much said in so few words. This has a wonderful timelessness to it.
Garrison
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the stones of your hips, I dig that
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Now THIS is just down right perfect Nothing more to be said about it
Phewwwwwww! I want this one
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...phewwwww - thanks, Allyce!!
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You my beautiful friend, are so sexy in the most wonderful way.
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as subtly erotic as it may ever feel. genuined.
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I like "the stones of my hips," the plea of the other's body and the answered prayers pulled from "my deepest cleavage." Certainly doesn't sound like anyone's doing any lamenting here. Earthy and intense.
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Excellence
"deepest cleavage"
I wish i had wrote that
or at least seen it coming
this cursed bible
of poetic verse
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thank you - loved your comment
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excellent, Nic
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godlike answers...
to life's most important questions. Beautiful work poet!
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your body’s
earnest plea: a prayer
pulling godlike answers
from my deepest
cleavage
the power of both: earnest plea and the prayer
who could ever thought of jerusalem like this
no one else but you
this is uber sexy
i wish i could write like you
i can never write something as beautiful as this
just reading your write lets me know how i feel
you speak the emotions of every woman
beautiful words like you are...so to speak
Anna Lee
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You always leave me speechless and make me realize how much I'm missing him.
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i know...about the missing
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It seems to me that answered prayers often seem to take root between stones. It's the bloom that takes your breath away!
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sultry, earnest, earthy and sexy...
but of course...
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{whimpers} Ohhh, how I wanna write like this if I ever grow up. 
You know such profound secrets...Gorgeous. Love it & you, Woman. Good luck in Melissa's contest, my Friend. Vlindertjie
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don't ever grown up, lolol! Thanks, Vlindertjie
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I haven't grown UP, Nic...Just OUT. 
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yebo, liefie...you can go down on your knees and "pray"
daily..
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another thank you - and a
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And one:
for you as well.
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I love how you have used "cleavage" in a very timeless manner. Can't think of anything critical to say, besides, maybe you might consider trying to scratch one of those "my's", since it's such a short piece. That is far from a critical critique though. Just a suggestion. When I read your poetry I am reminded of lucid eye-caves, morning windows, clouds that stretch for miles, teeth that are like pearls, and everything else that poetry should be. I know I've said this before, but you truly capture what a poem is, when you write.
Lovely.
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your comments are better than my poetry, James! Thank you - you are always so good to me
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Well I don't know about that...LOL. I try to be good to you. Your stuff just hits that side of me that I can't help but reach out for. Some poetry just does that, I guess.
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oh I did smile when I read this because of my entry...a vast difference though..mine was slightly bordering on the sacreligious whereas yours is downright saintly. Love, C
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lolol...not so "saintly". Now let me go read yours, Chez!!
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Oh God! You're Good!!!
Supremity & Divinity of Love
You move me, my Friend.
~ Nicky♥
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thanks, Nicky...i almost titled this one "divinity
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