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She dares to see

Missing image



 

Challenged by obscurity

blinded by virginal bondage,

tearing away at the endless layers

that shield her from the torment.

 

Her mother’s presence,

                             always haunting…

never avenging her worthless existence,

                             watches with stony eyes.

 

Helpless in her frozen form…

 

Yet…

 

The thickest blood stains scarlet those

purest wings that once flew free,

and death will not come soon enough

for this creature who dares to see…

 

Author notes

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here's your picture http://lady-dementia.deviantart.com/art/Paper-Angels-58589158

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  • BarbedWireButterfly
    August 24
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    An interesting take on the prompt which I enjoyed. A tad short for my liking but that's all good. The poem was interesting, more a literal take on the prompt than I had expected, it's good that I prefer unexpected =D thank you for entering and good luck

  • CinfullyDelicious
    July 14

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    A great deep dark poem here my lover boi

    love words like avenging and torment..strong..and perfect in your write here



    Cind


  • oikevois baby gold member
    July 10

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    Simon~


    This is the first poem I've read by you in a long while. And I must say, your abscence has most definitely NOT affected how amazing of a poet you are. This piece is no excption. I love the imagery you used. A wonderful take on the picture you were giving.

    Yet...

    Such a strong word that holds more meaning than I think anyone can say. It builds up pain...sorrow..angst, and [yet] there is more to the story. BEAUTIFUL WORK HON!!!

    Warmest of love,
    Mylee

  • AngelWithDarkWings gold member
    July 10

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    you did an outstanding job on this. how I've missed your poems.. its good to read yours again. you give her a voice and thats great. I can relate to some of this. been there a bit ago.

    good luck in the contest brother

    kat


  • BarbedWireButterfly
    July 9
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    hey, I gave you two prompts ages ago. Just wondering if they're alright?

    Please message me soon. Thanks

  • BarbedWireButterfly
    June 28

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    I'll give you both. Chose whatever you like or mix the two, I'm not fussed =D

    here's your picture http://lady-dementia.deviantart.com/art/Paper-Angels-58589158

    and your song is Autumn Harmony by For My Pain
    http://profile.myspace.com/index.cfm?fuseaction=user.viewprofile&friendid=42538494
    there's a link that has the song =D

    enjoy and don't forget to update your authors notes
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