an incoherant reality grips her with biting fingers,
shaking her to face what she just cannot,
the extinction of her being without her consent
has left her weakened by exhaustion,
instinctively taking a fetal position,
she slumbers,
one final time
Author notes
picture prompt: http://i167.photobucket.com/albums/u131/rosedarkthorn/Pictures/Fantasy/darkbluefairy.jpg
In a list
A contest entry
- Reserve and Wait by Rose Dark Thorn.
1200 points, ended July 2, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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You have expressed a tale in so few words that grips the heart and squeezes it into the realization that this happens far more than it should, and may even cause one to realize that that is what has happened to themselves. You simple wording grips the reader and holds them there in that moment, and that is just wonderful.
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No, it's not the last time she knots herself.
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this is great... great take... like it.... its good... thanks for sharing it.. good luck in the contest....!!!!!!!!
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the darkness just exudes from this poem..totally hit rock bottom..and the terrifying descent..wonderful take on the prompt..thanx so much for sharing..and best of luck in the contest..blessings..namaste..
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http://i167.photobucket.com/albums/u131/rosedarkthorn/Pictures/Fantasy/darkbluefairy.jpg
If this one doesn't work for you, let me know, and I'll give you one more.
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It's perfect. thank you!
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No problem.
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