unfurled blooms ~
deceptive in their beauty,
for lurking below
the shallow surface ~
deadly toxins flow.
Author notes
Prompt: Oleander (15 words or less)
written to depict truth of nature but also as a metaphor for deceptions of love.
In a list
A contest entry
- Prompt 10 entries/ 15 words or less by mysticstorm.
475 points, ended June 28, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Detailed critique welcome
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From the opening line to the last, I enjoyed every word. This is such an imagery filled piece.
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Strongly written in sotf flow of darkness...beautiful imagery...well done in brevity...thank you for sharing!
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very descriptive words, well done and good luck in contest
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Bravo!!! this was soft yet intense, and
It was deceivingly dark!
You did a wonderful job! I wish you the best of luck!!
Angel
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thank you my friend, for your comments, they are greatly appreciated as always, glad you enjoyed the read and thanks again for stopping by.
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