Should I lie or not?
The temptation of that lie calls for me
as I follow deep within the vortex of fluttering lies.
The beauty of that lie caught my left eye
as I draw near this lie.
Should I tell the truth or not?
I know it's the right thing to do,
and it makes life so much easier
the beauty of the truth caught my right eye
as I change directions and head towards the truth.
Should I lie or should I tell the truth
Both these options feel so right
but who am I to judge?
So I stand there without a word...
staying silent is the only escape
from the beauty of lying and telling the truth.
Author notes
Ralph Waldo Emerson:
Truth is beautiful, without doubt; but so are lies.
A contest entry
- Lying and Truth by BellaD.
450 points, ended June 30, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Well, I guess I don't have to tell you that it's really good since you are the honarable winner in the contest....buttttt I'll tell you anyway. It's amazingly good. You did a great job. I love the way you went from telling a lie to telling the truth then did both. And then you went to not telling neither and being silent. That was clever and so was the poem. Nice Write!
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I really like this poem. I love how you give both sides and then choose an option that didn't even appear until you decided to put it in there. I like it because it somewhat reminded me of you, when you just stay quiet and don't say anything.
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thank you lots ^_^
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I like how you've chosen to structure this with the first stanza considering telling a lie, the second thinking about stating the truth...this replicates the inner debate when contemplating the truth and its consequences. Well done.
Two proofreading points:
In line 7 its should be it's (for it is)
In line 12 feels should be feel
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thank you very much
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