So much making up who you are
Still things are foreign to you
Scared and curious of the unknown
Seeming dark but interesting
You send a piece of yourself out
To try new unfamiliar things
Like smoke you're steady
But can be easily swayed
Sometimes things are better left unknown
While others are good to be discovered
Author notes
This can be related to anything. Whether it be drugs and alcohol or trying out new foods and drinks, and finding love. The list is endless but I'm sure people can relate so I'm happy =)
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt Semi Quickie.. trying again lol by kiwigirljacks.
600 points, ended June 30, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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very good
I liked that. I can relate. I thought about life in general when I read the poem. There is so much to do within one lifetime. It is a shame that some people forget there dreams and lose their true self sometimes.
This is a strenghtening poem.
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powerful write! strong emotions... and i like the flow and sructure of this piece! awesome, keep penning!
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i enjoy.
I love how it is such a broadened topic
nice work.
with care,
HeatherXx
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This is a very intriguing write, kinda forthright but at the same time there's something ethereal about the message. Good job, this was very nice to read.
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i love unknown stuff like this.
it's very powerful and unique.
i like your style.
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This is a brilliant poem. I absoulutely loved it. =) It reminds me of a song from the sound of music ._. Weird, I know. But still, great poem. You are an excellet poet, keep up the great poems. =)
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This became clearer after I read the author notes, in that context, I think this is quite a good poem.
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Gotta agree with Jacks here....beautifully written and I also love the thought of sending out a piece of me...
Simon
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Really like the sense of sending out a piece of ourselves to find something new!! (hopefully not drugs tho!! lol)
Only change I would make would be not to repeat the word 'unknown' so many times, but to find something that means the same...
Great take on the pic!
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this is intresting, a good ending and alll
great write and good luck
take care
stephanie
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Pretty picture..the writing was hard to see. Lol I liked the piece though. Nice write!
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I like how it is left open to options. Very nice to inperate into someones emotions at their own will. I don't see anything for improvement other than changing the color of font to something a bit lighter...like maybe a shade lighter? Good luck!
~Kystal Angel
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Bravo!! You did a wonderful job hun.. I really liked this.. The only thing that was kind of weird about this was the font..
it was a little too dark! lol.. but other then that you did a wonderful job with the prompt!! best of luck hun..
Angel
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uuh... No words
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great pic can't wait when u is finish
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