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Imagine

Strike the parchment
two times two,
words formed from thoughts
as if from clay

Fine young letters
imagined
by that of youth itself

Play through the air
as if on clouds of musical notes,
Heavenly clouds,
billowy sachets
upon which words lay.

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I have invited my dear friend maralisa, and she has accepted.

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  • enlightenedatheist
    May 8

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    Glorious write friend! the heart felt passion the is within this piece is magical. Strike the parchment is such a wonderous opening like I adore it! O and the background...FABULOUS!!!!


    • pattyann4500
      May 8
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      Thank you. I liked the way this one turned out, and I truly loved the background. I'm so glad you enjoyed this piece.


  • Lyndon gold member
    August 3, 2008
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    Quite imaginative!

    Probably "as from clay" would read better than "as if from clay"
    "by that of youth itself" => "by youth itself" ???
    Again, "as on clouds", perhaps.
    I loved this poem, really. Compression in free verse is an admirable element, though.
    Thank you for your airy literati!!!
    Lyndon of the Winklings. All the very best.


  • thelordreigns gold member
    June 28, 2008

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    What a delightful poem. It made me smile at the imagery of letter flying through the air like musical notes.

    Beautifully done. Best wishes for the contest!

    Love and hugs always,

    - joanne -


  • faderman1959
    June 28, 2008

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    patty I always love to read your words! They always leave me feeling good! Magically written!


  • maralisa silver member
    June 28, 2008

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    a beautiful decritive poem creating perfect harmony to make a tune I loved the following lines just wonderful
    Strike the parchment Play through the air as if on clouds of musical notes,Heavenly clouds,billowy sachets upon which words lay. good luck in ther contest


  • Yemassee gold member
    June 28, 2008

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    Forming thoughts from clay...making permanent, giving life to them, shape, meaning. Beautiful words Patrica. I think you forgot an "a" in the title.

    • pattyann4500
      June 28, 2008
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      My "a" is sticking lately, and sometimes I type faster than I can think. Unfortunately I miss when it sticks. Thank you for letting me know.


  • leo2
    June 28, 2008

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    Again you wear your heart on these pages like a halo fit for the angel you are. Good luck in the contest.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long

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