tender throb-
strike me a
dotty bride
and I shall
wear you like
a holiday of
tongue.
o' masterful adonis-
fiery in
the black hole
of my mouth
you are unbound-
an elegant cataclysm
of stars
marked deep
with intent
like a
piston-shot of
flesh
burrowing hard
an echo of
disorder and
sweat.
we are serenity-
a fragrant mess
of parts
I am nagasaki
and you're the
atom bomb
Author notes
dedicated to the love of my life, james (apples fell). you are divine.
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Cute!
And gosh, I adored this. Your diction is really just amazing. You two are a big ball of brilliant awesomeness 
Jeanette*~
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a fragrant mess of parts... very sexy... wonderful write.
♥
whisper
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Pardon my lack of response, I work full time so I haven't been able to come on that often. Thank you so much stopping by.
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you, just like james, have a very unique voice in your poetry.
i thought the ending was perfect. it had the big bang effect i always hope & look for in poems.
all together, it was awesome.
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My voice is representative of all the things that have created the patchwork of tension and displacement that has been the majority of me and the fraction of strength that has become dominant within and now is who I am.
My poetry is the voice of the voiceless me.
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Pure plutonium here
Love, Chez
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Thanks so much for stopping by and sorry I didn't get back to you sooner. I'll have to check out some of your work soon.
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Saying anything more than "loved it" would be redundant. Though I could say beautiful, stunning, etc, but that might swell ones ego
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Thankies, dear lady, for the lovely comment. As I've said before, silence can often speak louder than words.
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Oh you guys are so mushy ... but you do it with explosives! This is the bomb, dude
Fusion instead of bomb
... that's just dumb 
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I think I've come to a good decision on that "bomb" thing. I like it a lot better now. And thank you for leaving some beautiful words on my poem.
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I'd replace "the bomb" for the sake of the sound
I am nagasaki and you
fusion
personal taste of course
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You mentioned something that was already biting at my heels. I changed it. I kept having nightmares about someone saying "this is the bomb, dude!". Thanks for the advice.
- Kenneth
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I love your poetry sweetie. It's always so unique and individual. I don't know where I would be without you in my life, obviously. I don't need to say a whole bunch of lovelies here as you know me, I can just say them to your face. I did particularly enjoy stanza five and stanza eight, the last one. Your writing is always strong. I don't think I need to say thank you. I can just give you a hug. You are wonderful.
Can't think of any critiques either. We already went over that part anyways...LOL.
Love you lots!
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Thank you so much, my love. For everything.
From the depths of my heart,
Kenny
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