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My Bed Without You

Rolling around
In the dead of night
Swaying to and fro
Upon satin sheets

Each time I roll over
It's almost like your there again
Waiting to hold me once again
Throughout the night

I know your only away
For a month or two
But each night leaves me lonely
And craving for you

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  • herrlurch
    November 19, 2008
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    Very sensual!

    I like the first stanza most, the dead of night is a good image.


  • Angelflower
    June 28, 2008

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    You did a wonderful job hun.. It was sweet yet it had this heartache and longing.. The only suggestion I would make is in this line, "Waiting to hold me once again" maybe if you put 'more' at the end, it would make that stanza flow better?.. That could be just me though...lol. But you did do a wonderful job.. It's soft and beautiful..


    Angel