'Twas often said in olden times
A paper moon sends love
If strangers Hap't to glance
Upon it's twilight from above
He walked along the sandy dune
She paced the gritty mound
They Bumped by chance and fell together
Laughing on the ground
The moon smiled down upon them
And sent twilight to that place
He Gazed into her shaded eyes
She brushed his sandy face
She began to tremble as he
Kissed her on the lips
She didn't understand it
But her heart did triple flips
He pulled her tight into his arms
She gasped to catch a breath
He explored where no one dared
Her honour met it's death
Her clothing seemed to disappear
As he was boldly firm
Pinning her beneath him
She could only smile and squirm
As passions glove engulfed them
It was such a perfect fit
All time and space escaped them
And they couldn't seem to quit
A lovers spell, a fabled tale
Entwined in lovers spoon
They gaze into the twilight
As they thank their paper moon
Author notes
Rhyme Meter Flow / I also used the pic. as a promp
A contest entry
- Take Me By Moonlight. by Poetryintheblood.
450 points, ended September 29, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Rhyming Pre-Write Extravaganza 2 by piccola.
600 points, ended September 29, 2008, 21 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you Think???
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Very nice job. I love the way it flows.
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Very beautifully penned
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lovely and sensually romantic. The rhyme and flow are very good too...it's great, thank you for your entry.
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Thank you for your most beautifully sensual entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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Wow phenomenally bewitching and enchanting!
Wow phenomenally bewitching and enchanting! This is sensational, what fabulous descriptives and storyline, and such brilliant use of poetic graphics too, it captivated me all the way through and I found it very moving and alluring.
I love these two stanzas:
Her clothing seemed to disappear
As he was boldly firm
Pinning her beneath him
She could only smile and squirm
As passions glove engulfed them
It was such a perfect fit
All time and space escaped them
And they couldn't seem to quit
Brilliantly expressed and the line:
"Her clothing seemed to disappear"
I love the way you put that, its so fun and innocent yet seductive and suggestive, in a nicely packaged and lighthearted way, as if to say that this was kind of 'accidental' or 'incidental' or 'well I didn't mean this to happen' ... kind of vibration, and that is so fabulous, bravo on that, love it, well done!
You should be in print with poems like this, you are so talented. Very enjoyable read.
Poetic Hugs,
Kaz.
Kazytc xx
Thanks millions, for your fab and kind review you are very inspiring and encouraging.
Glad you liked it.
Its a great honour to enter your wonderful contest thanks for the privalege and experience.
Poetic Hugs and Thanks Millions,
Kaz.XX
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Lovely poetry, a great pity that we have to restrict the number of winners!
Thank-you very much for your entry and please keep them coming in the later rounds, they are greatly appreciated
Jeff and Sue
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I like the rhyme and metre.
You have done well in this poem, The rhyme and metre is perfect and the emotion certainly runs high.
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Thanks, R S I'm glad you liked the poem.
It's always nice to get good reviews and feedback. D.
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