Entering m'vineyard of love
his touch replenished; missing
piece's of m'brokenheart.
Perfection 'twas precious balance
watching the ripeness of
succulent fruit; obtained
with thy mouth molded to thine.
He weathered storm after storm
wrapped tightly within
m'vines of sweet passion.
Author notes
Option: 6. Grapes of Elegance
"about her true love showing her love is for real; he was sublime in the elegance of passion"
In a list
A contest entry
- PIF PROMPT CONTEST by penman.
700 points, ended June 29, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I absolutley loved the imagery and metaphores here. This is very well written and so descriptive. Very creative. Thanks for sharing. Twas a pleasure to read.
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lovely
love your use of m'
makes it even more primal
a very fine, very sensual write
and totally not vulgar
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Wonderful
Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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Ahhh, very unique! Love this write
Very best of luck!
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what are you like m,girl? you passions again flow untapped xx golly good luck xx
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Smooth,succulent passion, captured within the vines of love. As usual, wonderful imagery, another goody by you my love.
Brazos
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Ah! Sweet Passion!
Reminiscent of a pirate's wench bespeaking her love. Excellent form and fashion. Smooth as the liquor shown in the picture above. A fabulous write. Best one I've seen in awhile. Yes I like swash bucklers!
Good luck in the contest!
Best regards,
Jennifer
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This was beautiful!! so soft and sensual in it's own way... The word usage was so wonderful!! it made it "old time" almost..lol. I really loved the flow as well.. You did such a wonderful job.. I really wish you the best in this contest.. It's gold in my eyes.. Best of luck..
Angel
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