I thought this love was forever
That we would never drift apart
But then you met my older sister
My heart felt like it was in a twister
It was the day you came to meet my family
You walked in the door and there she was
She had her short black and red dress on
And I instantly knew your heart was gone
Now I'm alone in a cold, hard world
But soon she'll regret what she did
Soon she'll know what it's like
What it's like to truely want to fight
We had 'true' love
You left me for her
I thought it was forever
Now I see it was fornever
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i like the forever/fornever really nice n simple way of explaining it. i did really enjoy reading this.
Can i just say though that you shouldnt be mad with your sister, it was him who risked losing you hes the one who knew most of all that it would hurt you, ur sister is also to blame, but hes the one who cheated on you not your sister, if u understand what im saying, anyway lol, well done its a very powerful piece x -
in the last line did u mean forever? other than that confusion amazing poem
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no i did that on purpose, but thanks for trying to correct
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Beautiful dark romance. I can feel it in your words.
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oowwwiieee got to suxx right there
but strongly put
and thanks for entering
take care
stephanie
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