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Impossible Love

 

 

It drips from your mouth
In lurid gobs of cruelty-
That impenetrable guard
You cloak around yourself.
A grisly sort of miasma
Comprised of rabid fury
And a mind numbing loneliness
You are hiding within.

It rips,  
from heavy fighting eyes,
Those fear striking glares.
Instilling a daunting resolution
Deep inside myself;
I will not leave you.
I'll stand here and wait,
'Till your smile kisses mine eyes
In the dearest kind of victory,
As your soul whispers gently
That the battle ceases to rage
And your heart is open and ready
For mine's sweet taking.

 

 

Author notes

Photo Credit: Impossible LOV3 by Bluefley found on Deviantart.com at http://bluefley.deviantart.com/art/Impossible-LOV3-ver-3-35710689

Such a truly inspiring picture. I just wrote one face of it, but I know there are so many more.
I wrote the poem under this song which I absolutely love.
http://www.imeem.com/noctulius/music/vi2FI2U6/apocalyptica_farewell/

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  • Nothing But No
    July 11, 2008

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    This is a lovely piece, honestly one of the best I've read in awhile. You were right, or are right still I must say you are incredibly talented. Thank you for sharing.


  • satan-
    July 9, 2008

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    love love love LOVE it! verry verrrry powerful words, and your style really reminds me of something I would write. The words are haunting and menacing, but still leaves a sense of beauty. My favorite kind! love the pic too, Thanks for entering!


  • robforte
    July 1, 2008

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    haunting.

    'Till your smile kisses mine eyes
    In the dearest kind of victory

    this is emotionally engaging.
    i feel this "wanting" (not dependence)
    and how it makes the feelings more intense.

    sweet write!


  • whatamanycando
    June 30, 2008

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    This is a poweful yet delicate write. You spin a web of characters who are outwardly incomprenesably different yet deepy intune with one anothers soul. One of life and one of death, two sides of a spectrum where the circle has no end nor beginning, as a death begats a birth. I loved the onward motion I feel when I read these lines, the sort of valiant epiphany that spurs each step within ones self. very well writted.


  • kirika
    June 29, 2008

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    deep

    Yes, it's indeed a very emotional piece. The second stanza is deep, sincere, and full of power. I can feel the determination to endure everything for as long as it takes (and can be much - or forever) to finally achieve the happiness in this doomed love.
    Last line is amazing: “for mine's sweet taking” - it adds such a rhythm in the end of your poem that left me breathless.
    keep up the good work.


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    June 28, 2008

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    excellent write

    And a mind numbing loneliness
    You've hidden yourself within.

    this is the plight of all too many. it is sad that not all have someone who would be willing to say the words written here to them and to mean them sincerely. you have written this extremely well.

    'Till your smile kisses my eyes

    i love that line. what i wouldn't do to kiss someone's eyes and be free from imprisonment.

    thank you for sharing this with me tonight and i wish you well in this contest that you have entered. i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future.

    viyanna rosemarie


  • SuicidalLover
    June 28, 2008

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    I'm glad you did a poem for this pic. You did a great job on this. Very vivid. I wish you luck!
    ~Kystal Angel


  • bolsabrat
    June 27, 2008

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    That is beautiful! Whomever this was written for has my envy. This poem has a keen sense of what love should be seen as and is seen as through your eyes and i loved it!!!

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