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The Teeth

You were lamenting the loss of your teeth
Like Nature was some sort of very sneaky thief
And you talked about more of the profound
Silences without any hope of any divine sound

Getting past the slimy ledge of genetic freedom now
To the elephant graveyard bones of our slaughtered cow
Through the psychical manifestations of the astral plane
The pink elephants that wander through the drunk or the insane

A chance meeting, a hug and a discussion on God
As we meander sleepily through all the lands of Nod
Bones are the structure that provide the shape and the ultimate form
Teeth are the wisdom and the evolved  standards of the norm

 

Look for the tooth fairy

The puppets are very glazy eyed and starey

Grind yourself into an irate and drunken frenzy of wonder

Listen to the chariots of the Gods in their spiritual thunder

 

Calcium and the glum

The divine motivation and the actual hum

Skeletonal remains and the formation of the teeth

Divine retributations and the bases of the actual belief

 

Georges.

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  • Baby Love Bunny
    July 18, 2008
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    i like i likenk that too some time

  • StroonsGreen
    June 28, 2008

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    Inneresting!

    "To the elephant graveyard bones of our slaughtered cow"
    that line is a little off--either put "cows" or "from"" insted of "of"
    "The pink elephants that wander through the drunk or the insane"
    That line got me a little confused, cause it sounded like the elephants were actually walking through ppl! Propositions, propositions. Perhaps put, "that wander through the minds of the drunk or insane"
    Besides that I think you did a great job with this poem, never really connected teeth with gods lol.


  • LadyUnique silver member
    June 28, 2008
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    this made me think of aging and how we watch our bodies betray us as they begin to decline. even at the age of 52 i've noticed it. but the big question is... when am i going to get wiser?? i still seem to have as many unanswered questions as i did at 22
    interesting write

  • limechic
    June 28, 2008
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    very interesting read...the wisdom of teeth! great write =)


  • cricketjeff gold member
    June 28, 2008
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    thought provoking exploration. If teeth are wisdom then how come we gain them so early in life


  • Angelflower
    June 28, 2008

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    You did a great job!! I must say that this was a really interesting read!! I saw this and was like.. ooookkay.. But you have pleasantly surprised me.. I really enjoyed reading this.. Thank you very much for sharing!!.

    Angel


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    June 28, 2008
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    ok--i clicked on this because i have two teeth right now that have sent infection to the jawbone and it hurts. you have amazed me with what i found before my eyes, nothing at all what i expected. thank you for sharing this with me tonight and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie


  • Avatar of Innocence
    June 27, 2008

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    sneeky (is a misspelling) sneaky is correct way to spell the word. No worries, I get typos all the time too.

    As for the content of your poem, I thought your rhyme was actually reflective of the insight into old age your poem's theme centers around. Good Job. I haven't seen a GOOD poem on this subject in a while, so long I can't remember the last time I saw a GOOD poem actually.


  • blueyez
    June 27, 2008
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    I love this... you are one of the only people I've ever seen that can make something so deep and metaphorical out of something like teeth! Your writes always make my mind start workin! Well penned grandpapa...
    Peace and Love always
    sara blueyez


  • DeGraw
    June 27, 2008

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    Fantastic!

    You're a word genius! I'm almost afraid to say more. You've said it all so perfectly!
    Cuudoo's,
    DeGraw

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