Let me hold you while you cry,
let me taste your salty tears.
While I kiss your trembling lips,
like I’ve done through out the years.
Let me put my arms around you,
lay your head up on my chest.
Feel my heart beat out a love song,
about our love that knows no rest.
Let me share the pain your feeling,
wish I could take it all away.
Let me talk to you so softly,
of times we’ve had another day.
The pain now is all consuming,
and relief is all you pray.
You ask me please to help you,
and take your pain away.
You look to me with eyes a pleading,
and I’m trying hard not to cry.
Although your pain is overwhelming,
I Love You Too Much To Help You Die.
P.N.
In a list
A contest entry
- Prompt around 20 lines by mysticstorm.
1000 points, ended July 9, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ♥ FAVOURITES ♥ by DinkyDiver.
1200 points, ended June 9, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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A beautiful although tragically sad write---Wonderful imagery here--
Congratulations on the well-deserved Gold and best of luck in this contest!
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wow such a loving sincere poem with a powerful, emotional and un-expected ending!! WOW welldone on the gold it was very well deserved Thankyou for entering it here huni xxx I really enjoyed the read
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Beautifully written with lovely words. Sad, but beautiful. The last line has a beauty in it'self.
So worthy of a Gold trophy. Keep up the good writing.
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Mmm heartwrenching..superbly written.
Such love, warmth and tenderness throughout this write
brought a tear to my eyes.
Congratulations on the gold, well deserved.
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This is so sad. It's a damned terrible feeling for someone to be in that predicament. We have a friend who was in this situation. After he died naturally, she said she was so glad. Not because she wanted him gone, but because he was at peace, and that was a relief for her. You really touched the heart with this one. Everything in the poem spoke of the deepest love for another and the words were just so heart breaking. Fantastic job with everything just right. Great stuff.
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OMG~
This is one Excellent piece like all the ones I have read and Love the rhyme also the emotions that tug at the Heartstrings
Loved this one my Friend!
Last line grabs so hard...I almost fell over my chair
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Wonderful Poem.
Hello there. Your words are very heartflt and describe the contest prompt perfectly. There is so much sadness when loved ones don't care about themselves. They don't realize the pain they leave behind. A great write I am sure many can relate to. Best of luck. You take care.
Bless You,
Sandy 
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All that pain and emotions felt
So beautiful and unselfish
Love that is treasured and seeing a love one suffering
is to much to bare.
Thank you for sharing your sad yet loving thoughts
and best wishes in the contest
Julie
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Thinks Julie, I'm glad you liked it.
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might want to open the quotation at the end of the last line. I love this it is heart tearing. I have a number of friends in that position, they can not stop. I am glad to see such work on here.
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Thank you, i didn't see that. And thanks for your comment.
Loseing someone is such a helpless feeling.
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Totally where I am! Very beautiful and deep I could not have written it better in my own head...hard to watch someone you love kill themselves, slowly...Beautiful in meaning...thank you!
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I was thinking of what if it was my wife. And the page got blurry, I didn't think i could finish it.
Glad you liked it.
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AMAZING! I'm loving this...this is very deep and emotional. Not to mention detailed! Good luck!
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Thank you for your kind comment. Im glad you liked it.
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