If I had a nickel for every time I waited
Until the candles burned to nothing, and my makeup had worn
Before I turned off the lights and stumbled up to our bed alone
If I had a nickel for every night I cried into your pillow
And tried to imagine something that could have kept you
Besides her
If I had a nickel for every time that I forgave you
I might be able to buy your love
Author notes
"If I had a nickel for every time I -"
A contest entry
- A Fistful of Prompts by VoltaicHypnosis.
750 points, ended July 4, 2008, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - enter a prewrite for comments! by etoile.
1800 points, ended June 10, 47 entries
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Comments
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this is so heartbreaking. it's short, and usually I like longer pieces but this was wonderful. the repetition was amazing and just overall this whole concept is amazing. great write.
goodluck and thanks for entering
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Ohhhh wow this is so heartbreaking, damn...
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So so sad, heartbreakingly simple and so beautiful.
"I might be able to buy your love" Exquisite. Quite a beautiful write.
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