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Everything comes to an end

With no where to belong and no where to be
I sit here alone accepting whats become of me
The world outside is hard and lonely
As I watch and wait for my one and only
No one is coming and no one will care
For I am alone and my life is in despair
Maybe if I had done something different then you
I would know what was right and what was true
But maybes arent something to wish for
And I am not the same girl you all love and adore
So fate has been something so terribly cruel
Life is not candy and flowers or even a jewel
Its those out there who wish for hope only to pretend
That we are all happy when everything comes to an end

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not that good, but tell me what u think i wrote this in like 2 minutes tops.

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  • kishi-tenshi
    July 22, 2008
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    I like the drama

    done in 2 minutes, yup this one is good...
    choices of words are also nice,
    it flowed great and it held such truth when falling in love...

    I love this.

    My favorite part would be "Life is not candy and flowers and even jewel", this is really true....

    no least favorite since the whole thing is very good...


    • Shydreamer3
      July 22, 2008
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      If you liked this I would love to hear your opinion about my other poem called "the infection" its fairly recent. I am definetly on my way to checking out some of your poetry.


  • Fading Memory
    July 13, 2008

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    I think that its really good, and true. Being alone is hard, its terrible actually. I can definitely relate to this. Thanks for sharing and keep it up. If you ever need to talk, I'm here.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    July 12, 2008

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    ya..the hard is life and the hard is the truth of life..you have sketched life here in your touching piece my friend....

  • cherryblossomkiss14
    July 11, 2008

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    GREAT JOB AND KEEP UP ALL THE WORK. JUST BE YOUR SELF YOU DONT HAVE TO CHANGE FOR ANYONE THE OLNY PERSON YOU HAVE TO CHANGE FOR IS GOD. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK


  • ali34
    July 6, 2008
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    the meter is off a little in this poem but i like the overall idea that is portrayed here. i can relate well to this poem and i believe a lot of others will too. in some parts it seems a bit vague-like it is lacking something, but ultimately it is a decent write. thank you for sharing and keep writing.
    ali

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