Dire consequences lay before the daemon of dreams
If he were caught stealing his dainty princess of wings.
The Daemon's black stripes
were hidden in light...
he took the faerie of night,
with wings of pure white...
And down the hall he dashed in a daze
Their dalliance damned, a love in need of reappraise
The dandyish daemon's smile was bright
as their life dangles on the point of a knife.
His darling dame feels too that this is right
to die together in a fit of delight.
But dawn is coming, the daemon's dreams are dashed
their true selves revealed, off comes the mask
The light shines on these creatures of night
and then even to themselves they couldn't lie
This dastardly deed just wasn't right
death to the love of tiger and butterfly.
Author notes
well, i gave it my best and i am quite proud. ^_^
A contest entry
- Photo prompt by X-Princess-Naomi-X.
550 points, ended August 4, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i love fantacy poems and this is no exception!! great write dear friend
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nice
it's got a nice kinda elegy flow to it good job smexy!
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A fine dramatic write filled with enchantment's adventure! 
BRAVO! Your imagination shines here. 
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Very Very Unique and well composed--Well Done and good luck in the contest!!
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i like how this poem shows death its deffinatly far out of the box for our prompt that means you are creative to come up with something dark from the picture, i like the rhyme flow, thank you for the wonderful entry to our contest and as always keep up the beautiful writing, ~Amy
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Brilliant
Great come back, if this is what you call breaking the block hun... its absolutely wonderfully penned poem... great imagery that is masterpiece painted with words that flow like gentle autumn breeze - warm yet cool... you are very talented & never doubt that... with such a masterpiece, you don't need good luck, but I'll say it anyways ... thanks for sending me the link to read this one or else I would've been not able to enjoy such a brilliant write... take care Minoo
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Haha. Exactly! That's exactly what I was talking about. You used words that twisted and played with your meaning in all the right ways. I really like this one. It's dark but almost airy; I love when people can put that effect in their poetry. Very good.
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Beautiful
A beautiful poem, I love the imagery and the flow - the sense of desperate hope and yet inevitable doom - a masterful poem
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