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Shooting Stars

 

Your touch sends shivers to my heart
As your hands, my thighs gently part
The love glistens from deep dark eyes
Like shooting stars cross midnight skies

Senses yield to pressure from lips
The longing through passion slips.
Words lost in realms of hunger’s sighs
Like shooting stars cross midnight skies

As first soft sunrays break the night
Desire peaks in honeydew light
Met by rhapsodies as love cries
Like shooting stars cross midnight skies

Your touch sends shivers to my heart.
Like shooting stars cross midnight skies.

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  • Nickelspring gold member
    August 5

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    Oh, love this one! Very sensual... had to catch my breath....
    I love the repeating line and the background/picture on this.
    Very enjoyable. Nice what one can do with a form..
    K


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    July 15, 2008
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    Hot!

    The rhythmic, repeating of the shooting stars line is a bit suggestive and quite delicious.


    • Ceridwens Soul silver member
      July 15, 2008
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      Found my wicked side already bang goes any resemblance to innocence... oh who am I kidding!!!

      Thank you Thomas


  • The Poetic Angel
    June 27, 2008

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    wow Jems this ia a awsome write i love the refrain and these 2 lines is my fav
    As first soft sunrays break the night
    Desire peaks in honeydew light

    xxx Your angel xxx

    • Ceridwens Soul silver member
      July 15, 2008
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      Thank you my angel, honeydew light does conjour up some rather nice thoughts huh?

      Don't blush too much darling

      YLD

      Jem xxxx

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