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cast away










you are an island
I can kind of
see when I
squint.

and I am a
rickety raft,
sinking
in your waters,

wishing I
had arms so
I could swim.




























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  • james119
    June 30, 2008

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    A few simple words to express profound yearning.
    Good poetry indeed.

    Favorite part:

    'wishing I
    had arms so
    I could swim.'

    I take this as an allusion to oars, quite a piece

    thanks for entering


  • acoustical
    June 28, 2008
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    wahhh

    i love thiss,
    and i have no good explanation, it's just soothing.