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She runs on Empty on a Friday

 

 

the mark of the wound is only a faint scar

yet the pulse underneath beats with ectopic tenderness

there a things that are missing

 

even now, she looks back never displaying hindsight

but she sees- 

her eyes reflect  inside those of the child she bore

to him, he said that endings are like nails and screws

 

you collect them, let them rust in the joints

till they creak and groan under the expansion of  wooden blocks

 

she - builds things

out of paper, scissors and stones

 

a new frontage

                                               yet

 

   

                                           same old, same old behind

this door

or that one

 

                                              there will be light

 




 

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  • Esmereldatitswallop
    July 9
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    I love the way you write Gilly, makes you feel every word!
    Debz xx


  • account disabled
    June 29

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    there always something behind the bright light
    said the train to the tunnel runner

    cheer up


  • MariGoes gold member
    June 29

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    I always believed, and still do, that light is never that far away, we just need to get our heads up back again, and keep our chin from meeting our chest.
    Hurts when look back, but sun shines even brighter when we finally open THAT door to let it in

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    June 29

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  • Lucy. gold member
    June 28

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    Sorry I took two days to get here Didn't realise it had been so long!
    Sending you 's.
    Love you xxx


  • jantastic gold member
    June 28
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  • Grunts Girl
    June 27

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    This could have ended at wooden blocks for me....
    but I see the need for its closure
    I love what comes from your brain.


  • apples fell gold member
    June 27

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    Sometimes through the darkness, a little hint of excess light peels off. This brings me to a place that I think is necessary for you Gillian. I can't think of anything critical, not on this first read, but perhaps I can think of something to say, in time. My favorite bit is the second stanza. I like how you said "this door or that"...It just feels so, indifferent. Like either way, it doesn't matter. I always think your talent comes from your internal meter. That tower that rises up out of the steam, a clutter of petals in her fingers as she stands facing the wind.

    Here's wishing you a great day love.

    Always with you.

    ;


    • NurseChilly gold member
      June 28
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      your words always lift my heart and makes me smile and feel so much better

      • apples fell gold member
        June 28
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        I am glad hun. I want to see you lifted.
        I want to see you smile. I want to see you well.
        And most of all, you.


  • Rowan gold member
    June 27
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    so very tender, beautiful, and wise. Damn fine hon.


  • Cannonsfire silver member
    June 27

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    They say that even in the blackest moments there is that faint spark...this tells me that faint spark is still there and it will burn brighter and stronger along the track you travel at the moment. Blackness is not a color and doesn't last even though it blankets us for awhile. You are strength even when you feel weak, it is there inside you. Love, C


  • Cat gold member
    June 27
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    i wish i could write like you

    i wish i could help

    love,
    Mary


  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    June 27
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  • Night Hope gold member
    June 27

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    "there will be light"

    ♥


  • Nicolette gold member
    June 27

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    Yes, Suzi said it so well...i admire your strength and your ability to write towards the light.

    this too shall pass and a new chapter is about to begin...love you, girl



    ~ Nicolette


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    June 27
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    really nice piece Gillian, a hell of an opening line...


    al


  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    June 27

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    A memory for you, a nice one, though it was sad as well..

    me and you
    in Louisiana
    after Mike had left

    my head in your lap, and you stroking my hair while i cried, and reminding me that it would pass, that things would get easier again.

    if i was there, i would repay you for helping me then.

    an extra

    • NurseChilly gold member
      June 27
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      i remember that and yes, i feel you right now

      thank you!!!!!!! - as always you grab hold of my solar plexus and fill it with love..

      i love you girl.. very much

  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    June 27
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    You need a recharge.

    I envy, though, that even in the darker hours you can write these with such tenderness. There is love even in the shadows of your world. I admire that.



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