Life and death are same for all.
It may be inanimate object,
Trees, plants and bushes,
Creatures, animals or man
All will pass through the same destiny,
The cycle of formation and destruction.
Lifeless objects go back to its elements
With which they were formed.
This world is no exception.
The death of it may be gradual or sudden.
If due to cosmic disturbances some other
Celestial mighty object hits it
It will go into pieces with all its contents.
On the other hand, due to pollution, diseases
It may die gradually.
God has provided us the route of salvation
Which only is the light of hope,
So that we are not disheartened.
When man is enlightened,
The death becomes futile to him,
Since Soul is omnipotent and It is our
Real existence we need not worry at all.
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Author notes
Prompt: 8. "All things we love will die." -- "23" by Blonde Redhead
A contest entry
- Defeaning Silence [PROMPTS] by Demmy-Defect.
700 points, ended November 25, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prompt Contest (B-3) by OhNoChastity.
1400 points, ended September 21, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - quote contest, by Uniquely-Scarred.
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You definitely caught the finality of this prompt. Death, something that must and will happen. You talk about that to a great extent in another very philosophical piece. However, where's the love? Where's the emotion? That is such an important part of this prompt, and this poem is lacking that. In fact, it has quite the opposite of love, it's lifeless. Now, this is your style of writing, and it keeps your pieces very philosophical, but this prompt was asking for more emotion.
This is another interesting piece, and I enjoy reading your poetry because of this. You speak your truths through words and inspire great thought. You are very good at writing about juxtapositions, and I think with some more poetic devices, you could make your poetry have such a strong impact.
This is, once again, a bit too prosey for my taste, but I like the general meaning of it. I won't bother to tell you how I think you could strengthen it, I've said it before on your other writes, but I will tell you my favourite line in this poem:
"All will pass through the same destiny."
Huh? Do you really think so? Very interesting and fatal, I would say. I'm going to have to ponder on that and get back to you...
Thank for entering all your poetry into this contest. They really were a pleasure to read. It would've been awesome to have seen a piece by you that wasn't prewritten. Please, keep writing. You make some wonderful points.
-Jen -
hmm....
its nice, nice meaning, though I am unsure about the flow, it feels a little different,
thanks for the entry,
love
-pranj -
great write, i mean, real great flow and meaning. nice. thanks so much for entering!!
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"It is our Real existence we need not worry at all"
--such a lovely line. it made sense to me--- as did the rest, of not most, of this poem.
it was a very good write: calming to read and logical on several levels.
i really liked it!
a grand write
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Inspiring and uplifting, infused with confident faith. Lovely write.
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Oh! that is fine. I really love to infuse higher faculties into others who are believer and not skeptical. Thank you very much for nice words.
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Inspiring...
Powerful and emotional. Thank you for your entry and Best of luck. -
'We need not worry at all'...well penned, my friend. I think, for me however, I would have to live my life with my eyes closed to become so worry free , but it is the journey that we learn from not the destination, right?.. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest. Peace, Rhonda
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Wow, the computer says this isn't a prewrite so you sure wrote this quickly!
It's very thoughtful and I particularly like the last few line because, while everything is ending, we are reminded of the eternal nature of the soul and 'we need not worry at all'.
Good luck
xxx
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