One long road
Has begun
Flowing intwine with the world's song
Sapphire rivers untowing to the sea
Creates waves of eternal motion
Glinsing like diamonds that havent been touched
The endless cry of wounded hearts
Can be covered in a blanket
A blanket of eternal hope
Crumbling history
May rebuild through the age
Time can not be replaced
Luminious moon glinsing over hilltops
Leaves desire of faith behind
For peace to recall itself
Surrending to blossomed flowers
Covering the fragile world
With its true colours
Our light the sun
Is Dancing its rays of light
To make hope forever
One long future
Has just begun
Having boundless faith in the heavens
A contest entry
- Dove Song by Shya.
600 points, ends September 12, 47 entries
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Does it sound okay?
Comments
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Peaceful indeed. i did, however, notice a few typos you might fix.
stanza 1, flowing, entwined...
2, ...haven't been touched
6, surrendering...
and a couple more.
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Yes, it sounds okay, and even better than okay, to tell the truth. It flows well and is filled with soft imagery... soft and peacefull. I really liked your imagery. A good write. Thanks for entering!
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