Rising before my very eyes
from a drenching abyss,
an apparition.
Her hair catching the sun
eyes like wild fire
an abyss so deep,.
she bleeds me dry,
my lips so dry I can't say why...
Voluptuous,
tempting,
ensnaring,
dripping dry,
to the tongue of a parched troath
while down below,
a sly snake lies straight,
awaiting precious prey...
Feet afloat,
bodies seeking...
and on fire,
loins gyrating...
sparks flying...
lips kissing...
between her tighs....
passport to heaven...
Before me she stands,
fresh as christmas morning,
sexy as summer nights,
contous to kill,
the master piece
of a master sculptor,
a godess on earth
a priceless piece...
Beneath the sheets,
a wild fire,
long gracious legs
pin me in place,
a searing kiss seals the moment...
No words,
just moans, soft as whispers
eyes that speak volumes
and hands that seek its own...
not asking,
but demanding...taking...
Riding together,
seeking...discovering,
and together, reaching the clouds
marveling at the beauty
and exstacy of each other...
The heat..
the sweat..
the kiss..
the room..
...us
....perfect!
OGENE.
Author notes
DIRTY PREETY....
A contest entry
- Dirty Pretty ♥ by Page Deleted..
425 points, ended July 11, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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In my opinion, I wouldn't call this dirty pretty.
It is however, a well written poem and I thank you for taking the time to write for my contest.
You have some good concrete imagery here,
but the presentation is flawed in regards to the length of your lines which disturbs the flow of the poem, making it a bit choppy, and there are so many lines which trail off.
And to some spelling errors you've made:
***to the tongue of a parched troath***
--> I'm assuming that last word should be *throat*?
***between her tighs....***
--> *thighs*
***fresh as christmas morning,***
--> *christmas* should begin with a capital
***contous to kill,***
--> *contours*
***a godess on earth***
--> *godess* should be spelled *goddess*, you've also made the same mistake in the title
***and exstacy of each other...***
--> *ecstasy*
Thankyou for entering and best of luck.
Keira
-- blackwood.baby
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