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Blinking Despair {1-5}

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Blinking despair rips at your soul,
bidding for dominance, needing control.
Denial sweeps by, clicking its heels,
taunting and teasing, see? Do you feel?

The tide comes in, reflections bend,
images flood, without an end.
Numbness is woven, laced within skin,
manically laughing, wearing a grin.

Emotions abscond, elope in the night,
fleeing the scene, trapped by fright.
You stand frozen, lost in time,
watching events played in the mind.

Evil applauds, sings, more, more, more,
death just stares, before closing the door.
Unwanted, unloved, no where to go,
blinking despair rips at your soul.

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Picture Prompt. Option 1 number 5.Goth Queen
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  • HaileeDear
    September 23, 2008
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    ahhh, rhyme is so hard to do and youve mastered it...:]
    amaziiing


  • FifthDove
    August 26, 2008
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    excellent rhyme, nicely done!


  • BehindTheShadow
    August 17, 2008

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    Wow, this has a wonderful rhythm and the rhyme is on point. Perfectly written, with a dark bite. I love it!


  • the.art.of.drowning
    July 30, 2008

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    wow. this is excellent. kind of sad. very emotional.

    Numbness is woven, laced within skin,
    manically laughing, wearing a grin.

    these are favourite lines. its so deep.


  • Arizona Sunset
    June 30, 2008

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    hey I know this thing!!! He has been messing with me lately! Kick em sissy in the butt, don't need him messin with me no more... excellent poem..best to you in the contest ~blessings always~ Trisha


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    June 28, 2008

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    sounds like a nightmare that just won't end, keep it flowing my friend and good luck in the contest


  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    June 27, 2008

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    ooh wow this is so beautiful,
    i love this lots! its so amazing hun,
    the imagery is so vivid, all my love,
    best of luck in the contest,
    kitty xxx


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    June 27, 2008

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    wow grandma this is an amazing piece, it really grips the essence of the picture and the feeling of despair. it was truly beautofully written with so much thought and detail to it. well done and best of luck to you


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    June 27, 2008

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    A powerful write hunny that really grabs with the essence of what despair feel like! Loved "numbness is woven, laced within skin".. know that feeling well!!

    Awesome write!

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