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Finly Autumn

Prancing over babbling brooks
and dancing with the trees
Feet buried in warm soil
as her hair is swept back by the breeze

In the water just before her
She finds a tiny fish
Spirited and lively
It gives its tail a swish

The wind blows all around her
Bringing down the leaves of gold
Whispers Finly Autumn
A tale left untold







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Finly Autumn

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  • Lucian Valcor
    July 3, 2008

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    yeah i have always loved the name autumn but when my brother and sister in law had my niece i told my sister in law i loved the name autumn and she took it for my niece thanks for the poem it was beautiful i loved it

    Lucian"


  • Midnight Raeven
    June 29, 2008
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    AWE! Autumn is actually the name that Lucian has always wanted for a daughter, but when his brother and sister-in-law had their daughter Jamie took the name as her own. It made Lucian upset for awhile, but his niece is most definitely an Autumn.

    Thanks for your entry!


  • grannyeri gold member
    June 27, 2008

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    Very unusual name - Finly Autum; liked the rhythm, rhyme and flow in the lines of this poem and the way you presented it like this.