My stomack keeps wrenching on me.
I feel like Im losing my grips on everything.
I know I had my doubts before
I was being ignorant to my true feeling like all the other sheep
It wasn't until it was too late did i release the veil from my eyes
But now it might be too late
And there could be nothing i can do
And the fear of losing her is more then i can bear
could someone please help me
could someone please show me that she truly cares
she tells me she still loves me
but her eyes tell me a diffrent story
I wasnt there for her when i should've been
and I was a fool to think it would be okay
and now as i try to stay strong in my will to thrive
she like an arrow through my heel
will bring me to my knees
bring tears to my eyes
as I see the smile on here face as she calls the other guy
the guy who was there when i wasnt
but now i must consider that she is still with me
perhaps im paranoid
perhaps this is all delusion
perhaps ive just seen my error before it was too late
And if i am paranoid i will not take it for granted
I will thrive
I will be there for her
I will be true to her
I will love her with all my heart and soul
she is my streangth
she is my weakness
and i will treasure her
my shining star
I will NEVER take you forgranted
As long as i walk this earth
I will be by your side
AND THERE ISNT A BEING ON HEAVEN EARTH OR HELL!
THAT WILL STAND IN MY WAY!
WITH YOU BY MY SIDE I CAN ONLY THRIVE!
I LOVE YOU!
Author notes
This is the first thing I've written since high school. not normally my type of work either...I'm just in the midst of so much confusion and stress that any release i can get really helps me...
Not trying to grab any sympathy here I'm just righting what goes through my head and trying to deal with it.
A contest entry
- lotsa points!!!! (extended time! I want as many entries as possible!) by DogTagz-TheJalapeno.
800 points, ended August 9, 2008, 52 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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first of all you do have some typos..L1 stomack...should be stomach..2nd verse L2 im..should be I'm...2nd verse L4 ive...should be I've....3rd verse L6 streangth should be strength...also..you forgot a space between forgranted ..for granted..and you need some punctuation..now saying all of that..you might think I am trashing your write..PLEASE DON'T TAKE IT THAT WAY..some guidance and a very good poem could be AMAZING..you have the emotion here...you just need some guidance..thanx so much for sharing..and best of luck in the contest..blessings..namaste..
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thats really good. i have a feeling that things will work themselves out
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Thank You for the great read , I entered your contest then came to look at your work needless to say I'm glad I made the effort -
Aw, like I said before, I hope things work out. I am sure she will give you another chance.
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