amidst the quiet of question
within one's inner inspection
the quality of sight
tethered upon truth's light
cleanses a soul's reflection
Author notes
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A contest entry
- Delightful Evening Quickie by delightfulmess.
450 points, ended June 27, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Convince Me by ea.
300 points, ended July 6, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please give me your honest thoughts
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This has merit and I like the rhyme scheme as well though I would fool with it because I'm not sure about the amidst and the within and I also think the of needs to be eliminated in the first line.
within the quiet question
of one's inner inspection
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of course, then you are left with 20 words exactly, which is what this contest called for. I am curious to see how people manage to write effectively with that restriction in mind.
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WOW! Well done you got a bronze trophy. I only have one trophy and it's green!!! Well I'm still learning, and just started poetry at school. I love it! Well done again for your bronze and you truly deserve it!
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Wanna know why happened when I reached the final word?
I actually went "Ohhhh" out loud
Good thing I am home alone right now
Bravo on a masterpiece
Congrats on the Bronze
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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You did such a wonderful job.. I love that picture, and I would say that you did it justice! Congrats on getting the bronze though I think it's worthy of more then that!
Angel
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Wonderful take on this...congrats!
Sue
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Just Beautiful!
What eloquent simplicity!
Congratulations on your win!
Would that we all could communicate so effortlessly!
Regards,
Jennifer -
Fantastic as usual.
What you do with words is simply amazing. Congrats on the trophy.
Jamie
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beautiful really love this one. congrats to you on the bronze
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This is a wonderful addition to the contest.
Your imagery is very vivid in it's brevity
And the words flow with such ease BRAVO!!!
Well done and well deserved trophy
Tony
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Such a beautiful take on the prompt. Well spoken lines to complement the picture so well. Nicely done!
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Congrats on the bronze and on penning a most intriguing and enjoyable writ.
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How very soothing! Beautifully written about inner reflection that is perfect for that picture!
Congrats on the bronze hun!
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congrats dear on the bronze xxx
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This is really a stunning little write, I like the rhyme scheme, and it just seems to fit perfectly for this contest, beautiful!
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oooh I love this. Great rhyme here
Thank you for entering my contest.
Delila
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ahhh ... that has a limerick feel to it (unsure if it truly is though, a limerick) .. Great imagery for such a small rhyming piece! Beautiful work!
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hun you did grand with this and the imagery touches the heart and the last line speaks profoundly. well done and many blessings always xxxx
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best of wishes babe
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