Knees huddled to breasts
I cry. White linen
caresses my skin; drenched
in the break
of my give a damn.
Author notes
20 words taken from a part of another poem.
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I like the dam/damn breaking drenching the linen... you, huddled, trying not to care.
Marlene -
Very nicely done.
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Love Juls 
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I like this!
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Dams, as well as "damn's" break. Maybe not your intention, but it fit both to me. Love the one color- you let us pick the rocks and water.
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I'm sopping wet
from your wonderful weave...
"in the break
of my give a damn."
Heart Hitting, my Friend.
~ Nicky♥
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Those last lines make this piece. Excellent 20 words. There is something strong about white linen on skin that truly compliments 'of my give a damm'. Nice nice work. I did enjoy this very much. ~Pamela
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20 very effective words, at that. Well done.
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I was not expecting the ending of this at all. I liked the attitude in this piece. Well done to say the least
Ever heard of the song "My Give A Damn Busted" ?
Good luck,
Kari
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i agree with all, you penned this nicely with a short few words, good luck
Lin
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I have to agree with Nicolette. very nice.
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Love the innuendo of "give me a damn" - well done, Trina.
~ Nicolette
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