I scribble your name in muffled chalk
Broken hearts aligned perfectly on the face of my sidewalk
Here I wait patiently for the rain to come
& inattentively wash you away.
I knew from the beginning it was a mistake
But I ignored my conscience and put my love at stake
I offered all I could...& you dauntlessly kept taking.
[...Let go]
It’s easier said than done, it’s simpler to dream than face reality
But maybe I’m sick and tired of questioning my thoughts
And wondering what this “relationship” could ever be
So you can hide your faults and regret the things you’ve done
If it makes you feel secure and a much stronger boy
But I’m sick and tired of feeling this way
So I promise & guarantee you I won’t be anybody’s toy.
You guiltlessly move in [too] close again
Addicted to your presence...I won’t push you away but I’ll let you in
I’m giving all my soul can give...& you don’t even care.
[...Move on]
It’s easier said than done, it’s simpler to dream than face reality
But maybe I’m sick and tired waiting for you to appear
And inquiring what this moment will ever mean
So you can run away and hold your head up high
If it makes you feel dependable and such a stronger boy
But I’m sick and tired of feeling torn down
So I promise & guarantee you I won’t ever be anybody’s toy.
I scribbled your name with the dull chalk
Fractured hearts aligned perfectly on the face of my sidewalk
I still wait for the rain to come
& inattentively wash you away.
In a list
A contest entry
- Your love is my perfect disaster. by ellaelu.
1000 points, ended July 18, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
pleassse tell me what you think :]
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If it were only that easy!!
Chalk sales would increase dramatically.
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“I scribbled your name with the dull chalk
Fractured hearts aligned perfectly on the face of my sidewalk
I still wait for the rain to come
& inattentively wash you away.”
Very good work.
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ooohhh :)
Hewbert Charlie Sue! Why the hell didn't you tell me I didn't freaking comment this?? Gawd. Turn yer brain on every once in a blue moon, kay?
I loved the metaphor of 'washing' these jerks away. From our mind, our heart, our memories. It takes a helluva lot of strength to let go .. and honestly? We can handle A LOTTTT of shit before we've finally had enough. Not many people have that much patience, ya know?
*I won’t push you away but I’ll let you in
I’m giving all my soul can give...& you don’t even care.*
Love those lines. Amazinggg. It's like guys are made without feelings inside.
*So you can hide your faults and regret the things you’ve done
If it makes you feel secure and a much stronger boy
But I’m sick and tired of feeling this way
So I promise & guarantee you I won’t be anybody’s toy.*
Hahahaha wow. FREAKING EXACTLY. They think they can just dodge shit they don't wanna face all their life and they CAN'T.
And we are soo done being used.
This was awesome!!
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'I scribble your name in muffled chalk
Broken hearts aligned perfectly on the face of my sidewalk'
and...
'If it makes you feel secure and a much stronger boy
But I’m sick and tired of feeling this way
So I promise & guarantee you I won’t be anybody’s toy.
I lovelovelove those lines, this was just wows. I'm bookmarking this, and it goes so amazingly with the picture, it was amazing.
♥
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This is spectular and so captivating. I was hooked from the very first word and motivated all throughout it.
I agree with Rose, the lines:
"I still wait for the rain to come
& inattentively wash you away." are simply awesome
And I must say that the background and picture is adorable
I wish you luck in this contest
Claire x
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Hypnotising, I love this peom it draws you in until the very last word and then you're stuck with it echoing thoughout your mind.
beautiful and i love the line;
I still wait for the rain to come
& inattentively wash you away.
I wish you great luck in the contest and great ideas for future use.
Rose
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I love this poem this is incredible I really love it this is like my most favorite from you!! keep it up!! you are amazing!!!
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Very good write. I liked the perspective you wrote it from. Thanks for entering.
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